/art/ - Art

i like it anon, especially the last line. the first three lines read like a description, contrasting with the last line, which reads like a present event. maybe kinda like you're sitting there with 'her' thinking the first three lines, and your train of thought is interrupted by her finger in your hair in the last line
or maybe it's your finger in your hair? as if you were reminiscing about 'her' sensations and now all the sensation you have is your fingers running through your hair
very nice

>>19 This is super cute, I just wish there had been comas to signify a list in the second line and maybe a more detailed ending…one that doesn't break the rhyme scheme so suddenly. That can be done thought, I just wish we had a bit more. That's really cute tho anon! Ur a good poet!